Bonjour fellow contestants! #QueryKombat is two days away, and I’m sure we are all tearing our eyes out pouring over each and every syllable. But as we all know a fresh set of eyes can make a gargantuan difference in refining our elusive query letters/ first 250. So, fellow writers, let’s have a critique party!
Here’s how it works: create a blog post of your query and/or first 250 (depending on what you want help with) and email me the link. I will create a host blog hop page where we can check each other’s work out and critique in the comments. If you do not have a blog, fret not. Email me your query/250, copy and pasted into the body of the email, and be sure to include the title and genre. I’ll create a separate blog post and tweet out for others to critique. Either way, if you are interested, email me at firstname.lastname@example.org or just tweet me your link. My query is below and open to critiquing as well. Good luck everyone, and thanks for participating!
Query for Hunted Souls:
Cancer patient Bixby awakens in Centerra, where giants hunt children for magic, harvesting it from their blood and selling it for a profit. If anyone gets rescued, the giants retaliate by killing a child in return. They call it “insurance.”
Dionté adopts Bixby into his band, provided Bixby follows his rules. Despite butting heads with the temperamental leader, Bixby obeys. However, he struggles to wrap his head around rule number 1: don’t rescue your friends. As he watches the giants pick them off, Bixby fights back, and Dionté banishes him from the protection of underground forts.
Bixby’s two friends, Otsu and Asra, follow him into the unknown. They share a common bond, because none of them have discovered their powers. With no magic and no home, they sneak into the castle in search of a way to rescue all the prisoners. However, giants seek not only magic, but four kids destined to destroy their race. By entering their territory, Bixby risks giving the giants the key to their survival.